Anybody reading this comment, I'm going to be rewriting this on my NEW account, because I couldn't remember my password to my old email, or my old account on here.

Anybody reading the comments, I lost my password, and I couldn't get into my old email. I'm going to be rewriting this on my new account, this one. I'm going to make it longer, and re vamp it.

i really want to read more of this. i know it has been a while but i hope you update soon

I really liked your plot, but was disappointed to see you stopped writing.

Tony is my favorite and I have come to really like the Gibbs/Dinozzo pairing whether it be a deep friendship or a relationship. This story-line has a lot of potential, but you are lacking depth. You need to add more detail to make the story more full. You make it sound like Tony is just balling his eyes out. I know he is really being hurt physically and I assume some of the tears are for Gibbs being hurt and the idea he may not see him again, but I don't think Tony would cry like that. He would at least be fighting the tears. He would want to be strong for Gibbs and the team and he would not want to give his torturer the satisfaction. Tony has been attacked before and hurt before. Sure it is natural to have some reaction, but I think you need to pull it back a little. Also the timeline seems rushed -- can't tell how much time has past, but it seems really fast. Again it may help to fill in some more details. Maybe even write a scene of Tony interacting with his kidnapper. Let us see into the mind of the bad guy and get a feeling for what Tony is going through. Tony always has faith in Gibbs and counts on him, but maybe he would be worried that this time Gibbs would be too late. Plus you Tony would not just sit there and take what this guy has to dish out. He would make at least one attempt to escape. How would he do it -- How far would he get before he is re-captured -- What would the consequences be??? As I said, you have a nice premise and a good beginning, not to mention some great characters to play with, you just need to flesh it out some more. As it is right now it is hard to feel anything -- you need to pull us into the story so we feel what these characters are going through and how they feel about each other. You have the imagination working and you know how to write so Good Luck -- Hope your write more soon.

poor tony, it's always him. can't wait to see the rest

interesting start. I'm wondering where this is going.