Very nice start. I love the premiss of Vance and Gibbs as Doms. Your English might be a bit problematical but not at all unreadable. I do agree that getting someone who speaks English to beta might be helpful. I am looking forward to reading more of this story.

Nice starter, very hot and kinky. Your english is not too bad, just a few errors here and there. You might want to consider getting an english speaker to read over the chapters before you post to catch the little things. Still a great story though, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter